I haz one more. o3o

Subject: I haz one more. o3o Fri Nov 21, 2008 5:16 am

I wrote another. :x

Fall before me

Every thing that ever mattered

Shattering like bullets to glass

One sharp noise in our ears

The flip of one switch releases our tears

I lost every thing that mattered to me

In one moment so quickly

The colour red covered my sight

And a lifetime’s happiness

Shattered in one moment

Flickering memories of that one life

Blacked so suddenly

Your voice disappearing

The vacuum of sound that echoed endlessly

The loud silence heard to me

The shadows we could then see

Threads undone from their seams

Forever changed to make this history

Only one life taken without warning

One to me worth thousands

And red ensued from you

Into the shadow’s silence

Forevermore in my memory

Forevermore within my endless nightmare

Reviews are welcomed. xD
And uhm... if you guys are willing to read my awesome 4-page poem, let me know and I may post it? xD
I think it's my best one yet, but it's so long. @.@

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Nov 21, 2008 5:18 am

-clapclap-

AND I'LL READ IT WHEN I HAVE TIME.
|D

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Nov 21, 2008 5:19 am

Okay. xDD
It'll take forever to type. @.@

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Nov 21, 2008 5:55 am

Can't you copy and paste?

Guest

Elfey wrote:: Can't you copy and paste?

She may have wrote the poem IRL first, Hoods.
._.;

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Nov 21, 2008 6:01 am

Cream Cheese wrote:

Elfey wrote:: Can't you copy and paste?

She may have wrote the poem IRL first, Hoods.
._.;

I know.
I thought of that after I posted.

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Sat Nov 29, 2008 2:15 pm

SILVER LIKES RHYME-Y POEMS
):

BUT STILL GOOD...

...Wanna try something challenging, Danni?
Write an equivoque.

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Tue Dec 02, 2008 4:37 am

An equivoque? o3o
Explain plz.

&&, I don't like writing rhyming poems. :<
It limits my creativity.

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Tue Dec 02, 2008 6:38 am

ERM I FAIL AT EXPLAINING, BUT IT'S A POEM THAT CAN BE READ TWO DIFFERENT WAYS.
LOOK, HERE:

I really love
to be with you. I could never find it in myself
to hate you. I hope that I will never have to
leave you. I want to forever
stay with you.

LOL I JUST CAME UP WITH THIS RIGHT NOW.
Anywhoo, read the whole paragraph through.
Then read every other line.

Get it?
c:

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Wed Dec 03, 2008 2:49 am

OIC.

...These are hard to write. D:

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Wed Dec 03, 2008 6:26 am

YASE I KNOW.
I said, "challenging," didn't I?
c:

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:46 am

Challenging was an understatement. :<

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:51 am

Oh, no it wasn't.
The one I wrote only took a couple minutes.
:U

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Thu Dec 04, 2008 4:19 am

But I like my poems to be really good. :<
I mean, I can write an equivoque without much problem.
They just aren't /good/.
This is bugging me. o-e

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Thu Dec 04, 2008 6:32 am

Lol it's just good if you can write one.
xDD

I wouldn't obsess over it being perfect until I had a lot of practice with it.

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:47 am

Chaos is the leading force of
death and undoing. Whereas the Light brings
Victory, causing death to thine enemies,
the demons. The Light is
Leading us to our goal
of a beautiful world. One bereft
Of carnage and despair.

SEE? IT IZ NOT GOOD. :<

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:49 am

I DUZ NOT UNDERSTAND IT.
8D

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:56 am

Well, if you read it normally, it tells you how Chaos is bad, and that the Light is pure and will lead you to victory/safety/whatnot.

But if you read every other line it's somewhat sadistic, telling you to use chaos to get what you want.

So basically... one side is good and the other is evil.

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Fri Dec 05, 2008 8:56 am

Oh.
It's good though.

You're just a perfectionist. 3:

Subject: Re: I haz one more. o3o Sat Dec 06, 2008 1:42 am

LOLWIN. 8D