PEER EDITING

so i have this dumb english assignment that's been going on for a while
and i missed the peer editing class because i'm retarded and my sister can't answer the phone for some stupid reason
so
if you guys could give me some feedback and stuff on it i would appreciate it the good copy is due tomorrow
i'm also going to have my parents look over it too. but i'd prefer you guys




Dear Mrs. Schindler,
First and foremost, I offer my condolences. To have experienced what you have been through is something no one should have to deal with. Not you, not your son, not anyone. You have pulled through admirably, and I respect you for that.
But now I ask, Mrs. Schindler, what is life? To you, I mean. Think about it.
Now consider it from someone else’s point of view. We’ll use the people who attacked your son as an example. What would life mean to them? I’m going to assume not much, but you may think what you like.
So we have established that the people who so brutally hurt your son did not care. In fact, they most likely enjoyed what they were doing. These people would mistake your ironic gratitude as sincerity. What was the point of your letter, Mrs. Schindler? For whom did you write it for? Clearly not for the criminals. If they were able to see the harm they had done, they would not be criminals in the first place.
If you don’t mind, Mrs. Schindler, I’d like to take a guess. Correct me if I’m wrong, but you did not write it for these criminals. No, I believe you wrote it for everyone else. Not for the perpetrators, but the potential perpetrators, the would-be small time criminals, and maybe even for those who don’t appreciate their loved ones as much as they should.
Anyone with the sense to care could feel the bitterness in your words, Mrs. Schindler. It was marvelously executed, a flawless response. It made an impact. With that impact in mind, you knew it would reach out to everyone who read it. Your letter caused people to reconsider their actions, to appreciate their loved ones, and to remind themselves that good people like your son are not all gone.
It is for that, Mrs. Schindler, that I sincerely thank you. If I had not read your letter, skipped that page of the paper, decided not to read it – my life would have changed dramatically (as cliché as that sounds).
You see, I myself had been contemplating a life of crime. I loathe admitting it, but it is the truth. Your letter brought me back into the world.
Morals, senses, the body; these things are as precious as life itself. Your letter reminded me of how easy it is to lose those things, and how difficult – if not impossible - it is to regain them.
Again, Mrs. Schindler, I must thank you. I feel these words aren’t enough to express my gratitude, but they are all I have. Thank you.

(Anonymous)


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thanks

ALSO there are supposed to be indents but they just decided to... die.

THANKS ICH